Cheesius's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Captain Jack]

Nice!

I thoroughly enjoyed that. Good job!

[Quick Toon]

Nice

But there was no sound at all! I saw you commented that you "fixed the file size" - did you make it smaller by removing all the sound? Man. Sound would have made it better.

Ah well. Good job on that. Other than sound, I have no suggestions. Well, maybe one - it would have been cool if the cola can had sprung a leak when it hit the guy, and then it could have just been spraying his leg or something. Not necessary - it just would have been one more fun thing to watch. But good job overall.

Hellstone responds:

I did't your speekers must be screwy,I just made the nirvana song shorter.
thaks for the review.

[The Bounty Hunter]

I had several problems with it

Overall, it's not bad - it's nice to see something that someone put some work into.

The problems I had - first, your method of "chaptering" it made it a bit tedious to watch. I think it would have worked a lot better if there had not been a several-second gap between chapters... It really interrupted the flow of the action, and there wasn't really a need for a slate between parts to inform us that we were moving to a new scene - that was pretty obvious. by the change of setting.

Next, the characters movements were sluggish at times - I think you could have spent a bit more time animating the characters, to make their movements a bit more realistic. It wasn't *bad* - but it's one of the things that I kept noticing throughout the cartoon.

Anyway, not bad. I'll go over my ratings.

Graphics - 7 - I rated it fairly high because you clearly put a lot of work into things like backgrounds and such, but it got lowered a bit because the characters were really very simple, and their movements a bit odd in places.

Style - 4 - The breaks between chapters were really quite tedious, as I said already. Also, the whole thing just felt sluggish.

Sound - 5 - Other than the music, there wasn't a lot of sound - gunshots and things like that were all... Train noises, walking noises, prison door noises, etcetera - these would have helped a lot.

Violence - 6 - Although it was very good in some places - I liked the guy getting shot in the bar, in the arm, then the hand - for the most part, it was kind of odd and sluggish.

Interactivity - I didn't include interactivity in my rating, only because all there was was the title page having scene selections. If I had included it, it probably would have lowered it.. But it's not that big a deal, I could take it or leave it.

Humor - No humor, didn't factor it in.

[Last stick fight - PL]

"Nothing too new or interesting" fits

It's another stick figure fighting cartoon. Well done, reasonably, although it bothered me how the green dudes kept just vanishing after they were beat. Weird. But anyway - yeah. It's been done, a lot, and while this was well done, I've seen better.

So... Yeah. Nothing too new or interesting.

[Poppy the cat]

Um. Yeah.

You know, I think the REAL message of this toon is probably don't drink random martinis you find sitting on the kitchen counter - especially ones that appear to be full of BLOOD. What's up with that?

Anyway, not bad. One thing I would reccomend is this - If you are doing a fade to/from black, it works MUCH better to have a black box fade in over the scene than to fade everything else out... You don't get the "transparent body parts" issue when you do that.

Hope that's helpful.

[Blue Block (CLAY)]

Knox is cool.

I love watching Knox animations. The problem I have with this one is that you're clearly just copying knox's style, right down to the simple clay people and random banter. It was reasonably well animated, go do some more original clay stuff.

[Hero ep1]

The credits were the best part

The whole thing was relatively well done, and all... But it was way short. It needed to go somewhere else before ending.

And why on earth did you pick the Happy Tree Friends theme? omg.

Anyway, my last and final question has to do with your comments, which are as follows:

"my first official Hero movie... yaay front page! thankyou everybody!"

Ummmmmmmm yeah. The only problem I ahve with this is that it's not ON the front page. So what's up with that? Are you just being ready because you know for certain this will make it to the front page? Did you bribe someone? What's up with that?

Anyway, yeah. Good job.

chrome-shadow responds:

yer it was on the front page, when u go to the front page, to the left it says "latest 5 submissions" and im there lol i never said it was chosen to be there heh

[Hyperboy: Episode 2]

Nice. But you're right - I had to read the comic

It didn't make much sense until I read the comic. Then I understood, this was just the continuation of the series.

Ok - First - Your comic. Started out kinda crappy. I mean, it was sketchy, and didn't really have a concrete plot. But if I understand correctly, you were 14. Ok.

By issue 100 of the comic, you really had the art thing down. You started doing more color toons, and then finally you started going with full-page color toons.

By the end of the comic, your artwork had finally come into its own, and the comic had a discernable, followable plot. Not only that - the action was well played. If I was reading this a day at a time, it would really have annoyed me not to have the next day's comic, I gotta say that.

The comic kicks a fair amount of ass by the end. Fantastic.

Then comes the cartoon. I have to admit, I watched "Geometry and You" - Then episode one... Got confused and felt lost... So I watched episode 2. Now I understand who the characters are, cool.

I hope your flash skills advance the way your drawing skills did - because you've got serious potential. If you could make the artwork in your cartoon look like it did at the end of the comic series - holy crap, you'd be unstoppable. That, and you guys need better microphones, or at least to position the mics a little farther away.

But seriously - good work. Looking forward to #3.

[Bunnykill]

Very nice.

That was extremely well done. Good job with that.

The only thing that would have made it better would have been an ending of some sort - instead of him just walking away, the bunny should have freed another bunny held prisoner, or gotten something. It was superb, don't get me wrong, this is the one flaw in an otherwise perfect cartoon.

Frankly, I think it would have been funny if the bunny took the other bunny's wallet at the end, and walked back the way it came, counting money. You could have done that in sillhouette, with credits or something rolling over it as the bunny goes by all the carnage, counting money. I dunno.

But yeah, that was excellent. Good job.

[Dumbass Dumbass Dance]

You were sick of seeing it.. So you did it too.

That doesn't even make sense. The original had class, and style. Your parody isn't even funny. Well, ok, it's funny only because of how much effort you went through to try to maintain your "Fat chins" there. You were stiff and wooden throughout, whereas the original guy was moving freely to the song. Plus, it was weird watching your eyes clearly watching your own monitor - I think you were either watching yourself dance, or you were watching the original to make sure you were doing it more or less right. Either way, you weren't looking at the camera, and that was weird.

In conclusion, bah. The original is still very creative and funny. Don't like it? Sick of it? Don't watch it anymore.

You have disappointed me.